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What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active.

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 there is a discussion about the rising
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financial
financiel
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financial
 problems of the youth. In my point of view,
this
 is not strange, because in the school program there is no attention paid to
this
. For
this
 reason, I write
this
 essay
why
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 I think financial education should be a mandatory component
in
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 the school program.
In a
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 recent study, that was done among young adults, suggested that 40% do not know how to do taxes,
this
 is a huge problem.
For example
, when a young
students
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 gets his
first
 paycheck and he has not paid his taxes in the right he or she could get huge fines, which will result in more financial trouble. Another problem is that
the
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money
 management is not good.
This
 is especially the case
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 many students, I personally see that there
a
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lot of students with
money
 issues.
For example
, one of my roommates does not know how to spend
money
 in the right way.
This
 causes a lot of stress for him
,
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 because at the end of the month he cannot pay the rent and he needs to borrow
money
 from other people. These are the main reasons why I think it should be good for mandatory lessons about financial education.
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