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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
work
 for the same
work
 in their whole career,
however
, other
people
 think that it is far more interesting to try different jobs and it has more opportunities to get a promotion.
People
 who
work
 for the same organisation all their working life may have a more stable life and they have a fixed social environment.
Moreover
, they can have a deep understanding
for
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 their working content.
However
, working for the same organisation and
do
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 the same things
in
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for
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 their whole career might let
people
 feel boring, and
this
 might influence
the
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their
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 productivity.
For example
, in China,
people
 do not need to worry about they will be fired if they pass the public
examinatiton
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examination
examinations
 and
work
 for the government. On the opposite,
people
 who change their working
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organisations
organisitions
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organisations
 need to face more challenges since they need to learn a lot of things in a short period
time
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 and improve
this
 company’s production.
Consequently
,
people
 can have more chances to learn more new technology and communicate with more
people
 from all
of
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over
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 the world. If they perform better, they can get
a
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 influential position and make more money. From my perspective, it is better to
work
 for different organisations since
people
’s potential ability can be always found when they face challenges and it is quite interesting for them to deal with different things
everyday
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every day
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.
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