In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, Fatness

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becoming more problem all over the world. Many say that

junk

food

ads

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the only reason for causing

this

problem.

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argue by saying that advertising is not the main cause

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the problem.

People

can control their obesity by

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some

exercise

and

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limited

junk

food

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of all, sometimes

people

sell their bad foods through

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advertising with some known person, which effected general

people

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and beverage company or any restaurant are advertising their foods with

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celebrities.

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, those who follow

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will generally buy

that foods

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. Apart from

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, restaurants are

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food

offer

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through

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