In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, Fatness

are

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becoming more problem all over the world. Many say that

junk

food

ads

is

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the only reason for causing

this

problem.

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argue by saying that advertising is not the main cause

for

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of

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the problem.

People

can control their obesity by

do

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some

exercise

and

eat

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eating

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limited

junk

food

.

First

of all, sometimes

people

sell their bad foods through

food

advertising with some known person, which effected general

people

.

For example

,

Food

and beverage company or any restaurant are advertising their foods with

any

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celebrities.

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, those who follow

this celebrities

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,

they

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apply

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will generally buy

that foods

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that food

those foods

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. Apart from

this

, restaurants are

gave

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given

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food

offer

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offers

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through

advertisement

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advertisements

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,

for instance

,

popular

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the popular

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offer buy 1

burger

get 1

burger

free.

This

type of offer

people

do

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want to miss. They usually take 2

burger

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burgers

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and

than

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get 2 extra, which

total

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4

burger

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burgers

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.

Thus

,

food

company

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companies

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are attractive

people

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to people

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through

advertisement

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advertisements

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.

On the other hand

,

people

can

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loose

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lose

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their obesity by doing some

exercise

or eating less amount of

junk

food

. For

examples

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,

people

can keep their body fit with regular

exercise

, which not only

reduce

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reduces

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fatness but

also

make

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their

people

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people's

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life

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live

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easier. Apart from

this

,

People

can eat

low

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a low

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amount of

food

.

People

need to learn to control themselves when they eat.

Thus

, they can reduce their obesity. To conclude, I believe that

junk

food

advertisement

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advertisements

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should not

banned

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be banned

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.

People

can control it easily by doing

exercise

.