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Nowadays , many people are spending less and less time at home , What are the causes of it? What are the effects of this on individuals as well as on the society?

#people #time #home #effects #individuals #society
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In the recent era,
time
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 spent outside the home is much more than that spent with family.
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 essay will discuss why that happens and what it is consequences are for people and
society
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. Regarding why many individuals are spending
little
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 amount of
time
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 with their families. There are many reasons behind
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 negative trend. Foremost, the high cost of living forces people to work all day to secure the average standard of living; rent, water, and electricity bills are increasing every day, which enforces men and women to work more hours.
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, many of them couldn't find
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 for their children to spend together in their homes. another cause behind
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 is the nature of jobs that individuals do, jobs as
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 workers or warehouse workmen exhaust employees all day, and
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, they return home late to seek rest and sleep
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 of spending
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 with their families.
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, both individuals and
society
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 will be affected by
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 trend in a mutual way. working men and women and their children's relationship could become loose due to less
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 speaking together, which leads to more social problems.
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,
society
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 will be impacted
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 of losing communication among families in the same avenue. in conclusion, living expenses, and hard-working jobs could be the main reasons why people spend less
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 at the home, which
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 leads to breaking family bonds and
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less communicative
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