At school, children should either be taught to compete or to cooperate. In your opinion, which form of education would best benefit society as a whole? Describe both sides of the argument and explain your own opinion

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Nowadays there is a big debate going on about the

way

children

are being taught at school. One of those things

where

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people debate over is the

way

children

are being taught. Should it be a competitive form or a cooperative form

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This

essay will discuss both sides and I will give my opinion on which is the best.

First

I will explain the cooperative side,

this

manner of teaching is based on working together.

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, making homework together or writing a report together or doing a presentation together.

This

way

of education makes sure that

children

will learn to work together,

this

is important because in a company/university it is acquired to work in a group.

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I will discuss the competitive

way

this

education type is based on competing against

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each other

eachother

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each other

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as, doing

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quizzes

quizes

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against

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eachother

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each other

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a prize for the highest grade. It depends on the child, but for some

children

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this

competitive element will make them work harder because they want to win really badly.

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it will give them some experience on how to deal with stress. To conclude, in my point of view you need both types of

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education

eductation

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education

for

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good education system.

However

, I believe that the competitive

way

is more important to benefit

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society as a whole.

This

is because the world is one big competition in my opinion and it will help the

children

to prepare for the big world.

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2Word repetition
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16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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5.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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At school, children should either be taught to compete or to cooperate. In your opinion, which form of education would best benefit society as a whole? Describe both sides of the argument and explain your own opinion

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