Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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Youngsters find it hard to focus on or put their minds to learning. The main reason for

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is that they engaged in extra curricula events that draw away their attention from participating in school and a viable solution is to promote actions and

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engage their parents

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involved and participate in their

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learning. A large number of kids partake in events

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not contributing to their formal education and thereby diverting their attention from learning.

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is despite the fact that they are expected to balance the actions they find themselves

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In Nigeria today, it is becoming a norm for every child to undergo vocational training. Most of these children have to report to the training centre after school, They stand to face loads of assignments given to them at the end of the day. In the process of solving the works given to them, they

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sleep

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and they end up getting troubled when they are unable to meet up with projects appointed

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thereby making them pay less attention during teaching or other actions in college.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

183 words

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Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

"Some people think that students benefit more from learning in classrooms with teachers than from studying online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.