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Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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Youngsters find it hard to focus on or put their minds to learning. The main reason for
this
 is that they engaged in extra curricula events that draw away their attention from participating in school and a viable solution is to promote actions and
also
 engage their parents
to
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 involved and participate in their
children
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learning. A large number of kids partake in events
that
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 not contributing to their formal education and thereby diverting their attention from learning.
This
 is despite the fact that they are expected to balance the actions they find themselves
.
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 In Nigeria today, it is becoming a norm for every child to undergo vocational training. Most of these children have to report to the training centre after school, They stand to face loads of assignments given to them at the end of the day. In the process of solving the works given to them, they
are deprive
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sleep
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 and they end up getting troubled when they are unable to meet up with projects appointed
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thereby making them pay less attention during teaching or other actions in college.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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