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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely.

#people #information #research #business #world
It is undeniable that interesting
research
 nowadays provides many advantages for students. Some
people
 think
this
information
 should be shared
to
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everyone
 for free, while some
people
 disagree with
this
 idea because it is too valuable to share. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. On the one hand, The
information
 from scientific
research
, business and
academic
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 world
are
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 important to those who study at university,
run
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 a business. Free sources of
information
 can educate
the
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people
 and give them more knowledge.
For example
, students who prepare the proposal for their final
research
 will find some documentaries on the Internet or in the library. If all
information
 can reach freely, it will be useful for them, and sometimes they can improve or develop some interesting topic in future.
On the other hand
,
people
 who think valuable
information
 or
research
 cannot give to
everyone
 because any
research
 has a cost
such
 as
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fee
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, testing
fee
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 and survey
fee
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. Valuable
research
 must take
long
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 time to collect all
information
,
analyse
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 and need to be confirmed by many professors to be
a
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reliable
research
. Some
research
 describes a strategy of a company in detail, so it should be confidential
information
. If competitors can reach
this
information
 easily, it will affect
to
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the stability of the company. In conclusion, these two opinions on shearing
information
of
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 scientific
research
, business and
academic
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 world, it is still
very
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 personal question to
everyone
. Both of these have benefits and drawbacks that have to be considered by
everyone
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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