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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely.

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It is undeniable that interesting
research
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 nowadays provides many advantages for students. Some
people
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 think
this
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information
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 should be shared
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everyone
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 for free, while some
people
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 disagree with
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 idea because it is too valuable to share. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. On the one hand, The
information
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 from scientific
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, business and
academic
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 world
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 important to those who study at university,
run
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 a business. Free sources of
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 can educate
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people
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 and give them more knowledge.
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, students who prepare the proposal for their final
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 will find some documentaries on the Internet or in the library. If all
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 can reach freely, it will be useful for them, and sometimes they can improve or develop some interesting topic in future.
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,
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 who think valuable
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 or
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 cannot give to
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 because any
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 has a cost
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 as
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fee
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, testing
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 and survey
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. Valuable
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 must take
long
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 time to collect all
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,
analyse
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 and need to be confirmed by many professors to be
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reliable
research
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. Some
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 describes a strategy of a company in detail, so it should be confidential
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. If competitors can reach
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information
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 easily, it will affect
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the stability of the company. In conclusion, these two opinions on shearing
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of
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from
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 scientific
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, business and
academic
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the academic
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 world, it is still
very
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 personal question to
everyone
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. Both of these have benefits and drawbacks that have to be considered by
everyone
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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