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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family thant eating out in restaurants or canteens. do you agree or disagree?

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The pie charts illustrate how six distinct courses were registered percentage-wise in a rural educational college in the United Kingdom in the years 2010 to 2012. Overall, at the beginning of the
period
, social studies had the highest proportion of registered students. In comparison, sports science recorded the highest number of students at the end of the
period
 while Carpentry had the least number of enrollment throughout the
period
. Sports science accounted for 11.9% of the total number of registered courses in 2010 and experienced a growth of 13.5% in 2012. At the beginning of the
period
, engineering and psychology which recorded 12.3% and 15% respectively in 2010 witnessed a marginal increase of 1% and 5%
subsequently
.
In contrast
, social studies which had the highest segment in 2010 fell by 5% in 2012 while carpentry and nursing dropped by 11.7% and 3% respectively in the year 2012.
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