We live in an age of mass communication, and obtain information and opinions from different media sources almost every day. Although many people feel that they form their own opinions, in my view the majority of people are strongly influenced by the media

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Nowadays almost everyone has access to the internet either by their telephone or by their computer, because of the internet

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information available from different sources. You can say due to the many different sources

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can easily form their own opinion.

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in my point of

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people

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are influenced by the media. In

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essay, I will discuss why I believe

people

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are influenced by the media. The

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reason, why

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is the case, is because of the advanced algorithms that many social platforms use

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TikTok

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. These algorithms are

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to keep you on their app longer, so what they do is they see what kind of pictures/videos you like and they find

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new videos/pictures in the same category.

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causes

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people

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interaction with

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that they like,

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ensures that

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live in their own world and think that their opinion is the only

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. In comparison with the news, you hear all

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informations

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and

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. The

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reason

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is because

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look up to

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"influencers", these are

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young

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young

adults with a

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of followers on a social platform.

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as Kylie Jenner or Lebron

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. These influencers have a perfect

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on social media, they have perfect bodies a nice

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and a

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sport

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cars. Especially young adults are influenced by

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because they think it is normal.

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, because they look

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to their idols they will

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follow their

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. To conclude, in my point of view

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advanced algorithms are the biggest reason why

people

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do not have their own

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. I recommend

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news

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all

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informations

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and

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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You would like to work overseas, write a letter to an employment agency. Write:- - what job you would like to apply - what companies are you looking for - why do you want to work overseas

Many people think that the government should not restrict what people say in public media as it is part of freedom of speech. To what extent do you agree to this statement?

Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries?

In some countries, schools are open late so that children can be looked after when parents are at work. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.