Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at schools. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, we live in the globalization era
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all information can be spread around the world just in a
second
.
As a result
, some parents consider that their
children
should learn about international news at school.
However
, others think that their kids should learn something else. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints and my opinion will be discussed in detail. On the one hand, learning global news will broaden
children
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horizons. Because they can learn
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new things
such
as trends of technology, environmental issue, world’s economy etc. that would be beneficial to them not only when they are
students
but
also
when they grow up.
For example
,
students
from developing countries can learn about
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effective information technology from some developed countries. So, in
this
case,
students
can improve their knowledge about information technology and
this
may inspire him/her to develop the nation in the future.
On the other hand
, others believe that
students
are already burdened as modern education is getting tougher day by day due to the competitive environment. They have to study for eight hours at school and after that, they take private classes to improve their academic scores and do self-study which uses their whole day. According to
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research from
local
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university
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in Thailand, if we force
children
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more about
this
thing, it will affect their physical and emotional health. Personally, I think that
children
should learn about new knowledge from around the world in an appropriate and useful way
besides
only focusing on the current curriculum.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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