Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at schools. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, we live in the globalization era

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all information can be spread around the world just in a

second

As a result

, some parents consider that their

children

should learn about international news at school.

However

, others think that their kids should learn something else. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints and my opinion will be discussed in detail. On the one hand, learning global news will broaden

children

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horizons. Because they can learn

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new things

such

as trends of technology, environmental issue, world’s economy etc. that would be beneficial to them not only when they are

students

but

also

when they grow up.

For example

students

from developing countries can learn about

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effective information technology from some developed countries. So, in

this

case,

students

can improve their knowledge about information technology and

this

may inspire him/her to develop the nation in the future.

On the other hand

, others believe that

students

are already burdened as modern education is getting tougher day by day due to the competitive environment. They have to study for eight hours at school and after that, they take private classes to improve their academic scores and do self-study which uses their whole day. According to

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research from

local

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university

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in Thailand, if we force

children

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more about

this

thing, it will affect their physical and emotional health. Personally, I think that

children

should learn about new knowledge from around the world in an appropriate and useful way

besides

only focusing on the current curriculum.

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Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at schools. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries, it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negative development????

Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people ate only the local food produced by farmers.

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

Some people think the manufacturers or shopping malls should sell less packaged products and others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many young people spend their free time in shopping malls. This has negative effects both on their lives and the society. (To what extent do you agree or disagree?)