In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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that

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needed. Today’s

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home

whether having their own

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. In some countries, for some

people

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owning a

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are more important rather than just renting

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. As a human, we like to have the stuff or things that we called our own

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home

. If

person

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decided to buy a

home

, they can feel be

success

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because they have some money to get their own

home

. Owning a

home

could get

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freedom

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to renovate or

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our

home

, we have chosen what

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bed we want, the wall paint depends on our

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color

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or the best material for each part in our

home

People

will always want to be decided their best choice.

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, if they rent a

home

, they can’t

painted

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their wall or renovated their

home

part

such

as their room without

allowed

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by the

home owner

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. The

people

that

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renting

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home

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a home

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are usually not have

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a strict

job

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that they always move from

one

place to another place, so they decided to renting a

home

rather than

owning

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home

. Renting a

home

is a simple choice if we

don’t

have enough money to buy a

home

, we

don’t

pay a

home

tax, we just stay at

home

without

buy

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properties to complete that

home

because the renting

home

have

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completed by the

home owner

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. If there are disasters in that place, we

don’t

need to confuse about the properties because it is not our own.

Although

, the drawbacks of renting

home

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a home

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are we can’t

ownership

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our

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bed and properties. We can’t focus

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our work or study and

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have privacy because the wall

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one

home

to another

home

is very close. It can make discomfort for

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and our

neighbor

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. In conclusion, I believe that having own

home

is very important rather than renting

one

because it

have

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many advantages. As

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human

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being

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we have to

decided

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own

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our own

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things and

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be happy if we have ownership

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our life.

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ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
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belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
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