Many people use distance learning programmes to study at home, but others think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Learning does come with a continuous effort, and
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of learning could be endless.
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education is classified into two broad categories :
distance
learning and attending colleges or universities. Through
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essay, I disagree that learning from
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way will be
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more beneficial than
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learning. To start with,
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crucial benefit I see with
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is that students can
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themselves in other online/
distance
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, wherein
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a student
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student
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students
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can earn dual
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within the specified time period.
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, when I was
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, I enrolled myself
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learning
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,one in
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in computer application from Delhi
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, and
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in bachelor in data science through
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university
. It helped a lot in
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professional growth.
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such
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degree cannot be obtained if
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pursue
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through through
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classroom learning.
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learning
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can be completed
in
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a minimal cost, whereas hefty
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to pay to the college/
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, plus there will be a living cost if a particular college or
university
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in
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, rather than home town.
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learning curriculum
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across weeks,followed by weekly and monthly
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. With
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learning structure ,students will complete their course
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and
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their best to obtain
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score
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.
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,
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path is missing in traditional classes room learning.
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, during graduation time I had to work hard to get at least 65%
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overall
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weekly test ,
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I was not eligible to write for
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test
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.
Distance learning
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would be more effective if
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the student
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is working professional and pursue
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a course
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in the same field.
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,when I
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was working in Zee technology,I pursued
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program
in
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of computer application, and
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experience helped me a lot in understanding topics covered in
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, plus submitting practical projects. To conclude
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,
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my opinion
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distance
running could be more effective than classroom learning, where students can take maximum benefits if
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has
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vision
towards
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carrier
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path.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-learning
  • Virtual classroom
  • Self-paced learning
  • Asynchronous/synchronous sessions
  • Digital divide
  • Interactive learning
  • Accreditation
  • Webinar
  • MOOC (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • Pedagogy
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