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As a country develops, people tend to buy more cars. Do the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment.

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There has been a controversy about whether
cars
 can adversely affect the environment where we live. I would say
vehicles
 are detrimental to nature, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost.
Vehicles
 increase carbon emissions. According to some statistical figures, transportation contributes 24% of global greenhouse gas. In the US, 29% of greenhouse gas is from
vehicles
. Except for carbon emissions, other by-products of a
car
 are disadvantageous to the environment too.
For instance
,
cars
 produce carbon monoxide, which is one of the main causes of lung cancer.
Besides
, all the by-products can raise the temperature and worsen global warming to a large extent.
Second
, the assembly process of
vehicles
 requires a large number of resources. Due to the growth of the human population, the demand for
cars
 has ascended.
Hence
, factories produce more
cars
;
in other words
, many resources,
such
 as metal, are used. In
this
 case,
such
 a situation can lead to a global metal resources shortage. It's worth mentioning that the disposal process of
cars
 is detrimental too.
For instance
, each
car
 has a
car
 battery; it contains some liquid which can adversely affect nature. If
vehicles
 are not disassembled carefully, the items of a
car
 can cause pollution.
On the other hand
,
cars
 have many advantages.
For example
, a
car
 brings convenience to our life, it shortens the time we spend on the road. And a
car
 can give us a private space in public areas. In conclusion, I would say the disadvantages of a
car
 outstrip its advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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