You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you would like the job -give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Mr and Mrs Collins, My name is Carola. I have seen your advertisement in a magazine and I'

writing to you because I would like to be considered for the position you are offering. I really would like to work for you because I think it will be a good experience for you and me. I like to travel, know about different cultures and meet new people. I have never been to Australia but I'

pretty sure

there

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lot of things to see and try. I have previous experience looking after children.

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working for an Irish family and I take care of ofr children whose ages vary from three to eight. I have to say that I've never thought looking after children would be that rewarding. I enjoy spending time with them and I have

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a lot. I'

really patient, tidy, reliable and hard working.

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first

aids

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course. If I had the chance to live with you would be great. I would spend my free time learning English, visiting

turist

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attractions, trying local food and making new friends. Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. Please feel free to contact me if you need

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details and recommendations. Kind regards, Carola

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