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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays,learning new languages becomes an upward trend among
people
 because of globalisation and flourishing technology.Some
people
 assume that the only reason
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that is
 to travel or work in other countries.Some of them
also
 argue that these are not the single reasons why we should learn a new
language
.In
this
 essay,we will discuss both aspects of these debatable issues .
First
 of all,in
this
 ever-advanced modern world,being
a
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multilingual could bring you so many opportunities .
For example
,many young adults in my country are now tremendously learning Japanese to be able to work in Japan .The only reason is that the basic salary in Japan is much
more
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higher than
that
is
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in our country.We cannot deny that high salaries are one of the forcing motives for learning a new
language
.In
this
morden
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modern
worl
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world
work
,travelling to new destinations becomes popular because of better
transportations
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.
Although
 it is not vital to learn a new
language
 to travel,it is always better to know some of the basic words so you can connect with new
people
 and broaden your horizons.
In addition
,for the students who are eager to study in higher ranking universities in foreign countries,fluency in the original
language
 of the chosen country comes
first
.There is no doubt that would make
one
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 easy to overcome the challenges
in
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abroad.Another reason is that learning multiple languages can delay brain
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 and supports the cells inside of it .On top of that,the chances of getting Alzheimer's disease and memory loss are considerably low in
people
 who
speaks
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 two or more languages. Taking everything into
considerations
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,for some
people
 ,
although
 the main
factors
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 of learning a foreign
language
is
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 to travel or work in other countries,we cannot the benefits we could get from it including supporting brain memory and wider social community.
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