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In many cities many people are living alone What are the reason for it? Is this a positive or a negative?

#cities #people #reason
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The chart below shows information about the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2) one person releases into
atmosphere
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 which is collected from
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UK
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the UK
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 1967 At
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first
frist
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 in 1967, there were more than 1,5
tonnes
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 of CO2 per person discharged in Portugal, 4,2-tonne in Italy, 8,8
tonnes
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 of gases in
Sweden
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 and the highest one was
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UK
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 with 10,4
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 per citizen. ( The
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 have the most emissions of the 4 countries with about 10,4 tons and 8,8 tons respectively in 1977, 4 times more than Italy and 5 times more than Portugal). While other
countries’s
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gases
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 releases increased to
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 level in 1977, the rate in
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UK
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the UK
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stabilize
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 and
and
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tended to decrease.
During
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 1977 to 1997, the trend of
carbon
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dioxide
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 emissions had two different ways. The
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first
frist
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 one which had the increasing rate, the developing countries tended to
went
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 up include Portugal ( from 2,1 to 5,3
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) and Italy (from 6,1 to 7,8
tonnes
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). Whereas, in
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, there was a sudden fall of 6
tonmes
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tonnes
 and 8,8
tonnes
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 in
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UK
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.
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, the figures for
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 and Portugal were at about 5,7
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 while they
they
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reached about 8
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 in both Italy and
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 in 2007. Overall, the inhabitants of the
UK
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 are responsible for the highest discharge of all time. ( At the downward trends are considered to be connected with the changes
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is
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 economic development and high-, tech inventions which reduce
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of
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carbon
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dioxide
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)
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