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Some people think to be successful, you need to get in a university education, whereas other say that it is not true. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #university #education
The efficiency of
university
education
 on a
people
’s
life
 is debatable. Some individuals opine that it is
must
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a must
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 to get a
university
degree
for
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to
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 become
sucessful
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successful
,
while
 others oppose
this
 view. I believe that higher
education
 is necessary
on
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in
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 a
person
’s
life
 but a
person
 can be effectual without
third level
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third-level
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education
.  The prime reason why some
people
 believe that success depends on tertiary
education
 is that it is essential
on
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for
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 professional
career
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careers
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such
 as
Job
, Teaching, and Scientist etc.
An
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A
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university
degree
 is
mustly
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mostly
 needed for
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of occupation. Completing higher
education
 on a specific subject can give a
person
good
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a good
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job
 on
this
 individual platform which may help to become
effectual
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effective
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.
For example
, if a
person
want
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wants
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 to get a
job
 in a
comanies
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company
 accounting department, the company will
firstly
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first
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 check how
much qualification
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many qualifications
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 he/she
have
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has
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on
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in
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this
 subject. Without a higher
degree
on
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in
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 accounting,
this
person
 can get
this
job
. So, the more tertiary
education
 you have, the greater chance there will be to become successful
on
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in
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professional
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a professional
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 career.  
On the other hand
, those who say that
acievement
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achievement
 does not depend on
third level
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third-level
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education
 give their reason
is
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apply
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that a talented
person
 can become successful without
institutional
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an institutional
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degree
. History says that
,
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apply
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 many of the famous
people
 of the world become famous
due to
 their greatest invention which we constantly use in our daily
life
, but those
people
 did not complete a graduation
degree
. Mark
juckerbag
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Juckerbag
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,
for instance
,
one
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is one
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 of the
world
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world's
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 reaches
person
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people
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 and
founder
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the founder
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 of Facebook - the most popular technology
of
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on
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 the earth, but he failed
on
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in
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 his 12th class.
Moreover
, there are lots of
sector
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sectors
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 where you can
be
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apply
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become famous
,
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apply
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 if you have
specific
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a specific
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 talent or skill. To be more specific, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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famous
actor
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actors
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 and athletes
such
 as
Footballer
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footballers
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has
Verb problem
do
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 not
any
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have any
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 higher
education
. So without a higher
education
, a
person
 can be successful.
To sum up
,
university
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a university
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education
 is a valuable
acievement
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achievement
achievements
 in a
person
’s
life
. Some
people
 think it is the only key to
become
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becoming
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efectual
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effective
;
however
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however,
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 others
argued
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argue
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 with them. In my opinion, it is needed if a
person
want
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wants
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 to be made a
prefessional
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professional
 career but there are lots of
sector
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sectors
show examples
 where it is not important to become
succesful
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successful
.
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coherence cohesion
Expand on the reasons why higher education may not be necessary for success, providing more specific examples. Use a wider range of vocabulary and ensure each point is supported with evidence.
task achievement
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly addresses the prompt, and provide a balanced view of both perspectives. Focus on supporting your ideas with relevant and specific examples, avoiding repetition.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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