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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many people argued that it is important to use countries’
budget
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 for expanding railway
line
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lines
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 for fast-moving
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train
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trains
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 between towns while others think that the governments should
spent
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 on making better existing public transport.
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, in
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 essay, I will examine both
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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.
To begin
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 with, new railways may suitable only for those who has frequently travel
in
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long distance. The new fast metros will help them to
safe
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 time and they will have more time to do other things.
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, the old may take ten hours
transporting
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to transport
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 from Bangkok to
Chianmai
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Chiangmai
 but the new
train
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 may take only five hours. As you can see,
this
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 technology will be beneficial for
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long-distance
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long distance
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traveller
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travellers
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.
In contrast
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, it is undeniable that everyone
do
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 not have the same opinion. It is because there is a group of people, who believe that we should
first
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 improve our existing public transportation. It is true that many old
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train
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trains
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 still fully functioning and need only
little
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a little
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 maintenance cost.
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, Bangkok’s subway
trains
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,
They
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apply
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have been
using
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 for many decades but just some
part
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parts
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 of
it
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them
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need
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 to be fixed. From
this
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 matter, we can choose to reparation rather than buy new
trains
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 in order to save
the
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money.
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, the government will have money left on other parts, which is seen
more
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 worth. In conclusion, either choosing to create new
trains
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 line or improving existing
trains
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, there are advantages for both groups. In my opinion, we should spend on improving the ancient
train
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 because we will have money left to spend
developing
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on developing
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 other areas in the country.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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