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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#information #features #comparisons
The chart demonstrates the trend of using
internet
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 in 2 genders at the age of 15-24 in Canada in 2000. It is obvious that
,
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 both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 mainly use
internet
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 for email. The other
activities
 mentioned are social networks; online shopping and so on. In
term
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terms
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 of
female’s
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females’
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interest
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interests
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 compared to
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males
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, it is apparent that
,
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 email and online shopping were
more
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preferable. 48%
email
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 users were female while
this
 figure was 7% less
in
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 male users.
A part
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 from
this
, online shopping
also
 took part in as the 2nd predominance.
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Moreover
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Moreover
, 19%
women
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of women
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 used
internet
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the internet
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 for purchasing whilst only 13%
men
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of men
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 browsed the
internet
 for the same purpose. Let’s look at
male’s
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 usage
trend
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trends
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, compared to
female’s
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females
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, social networks and other
activities
 seemingly were the 2
activities
 that attracted
man
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men
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 more than women.
Besides
 28% man engaged in social networks, while only 24% of women paid attention to
this
 activity. The remaining
activities
 played a mystery in
this
 research when the percentage of
man
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 was 9% more than
its
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 opposite gender which hit 9%.
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