Some people think children should attend extra classes after school, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary epoch,there is irrefutable debate among folks about young
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anticipate kids should take part in additional
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after school while at the same
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withstand the stated notion because more
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facilitate better
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performance
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time
for other essential
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will be limited.
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paragraph.
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will always show results because the teachers will have ample
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in attending
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weak areas as a
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their performance will
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a toddler
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who
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to perform
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must go
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mile to outshine
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the exam can be complicated
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they place themself in a position to beat all
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by Kenjohn(2020) in Uganda depicts that 90% of
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who
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well attend
further
classes
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the child confidence in performing better in
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Consequently
,
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teenager
teenagers
who attend special
classes
never
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as they are well prepared to face any challenge in the test.
On the other hand
,engaging a child with only school activity is detrimental as they are not able to handle other essential
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studies
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Moreover
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lifestyle which will lead to
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such
as diabetes.
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of Nairobi depicts that 70% of students currently cannot perform house chores by the
time
they are done with
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level of education.
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of social
activities
can cause
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to a child because they do not create
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commitment
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academic studies. To sum up,
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would like to restate my perspective that
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supplementary
classes
are indispensable as they facilitate
performance
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of the children.
However
,imperative social
activities
will be displaced by extra
time
created for studying which can lead to
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diseases.
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