It is often claimed that wealthy nations should provide financial support to poorer countries for welfare, health, and education. However, there are those who believe that developing countries have to bear their own responsibility for the conditions in their lands and not receive any aid. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that affluent

countries

should assist financially more destitute

nations

while

others

believe that

second

-class

countries

' authorities are obliged to assume responsibility for the quality of residents' lives without relying on

others

This

essay agrees that

countries

must

support

each other;

nevertheless

, both views of the arguments will be discussed below.

To begin

with, by helping less fortunate

countries

for their wealfareness, wealthy

nations

support

economic and political attitudes.

Moreover

, it strengthens the relationships between

countries

and leads to political stability, decreased crimes, and global trade. I completely agree with it. As an illustration, in 2020, the USA helped India with money and,

as a result

, they have been maintaining a strong bond that, nowadays, India is one of the top ten largest trading partners of the USA.

This

example proves that financial assistance can be beneficial for both sides.

However

, in spite of the fact that it incurs political stability, many still think that poor

nations

should encounter a problem by themselves.

This

is because destitute

countries

can be accustomed to having material

support

which will result in dereliction of duty since an authority may not do its work properly by counting on

others

, yet I disapprove of

this

concept. If upper-class

nations

do not help low-income

countries

, it will pose a threat of political instability. It has been proven by the Great War of Africa where people were fighting for mineral deposits to make money and improve the people's well-being in the country.

Therefore

, it illustrates how wrong those who consider material

support

to less fortunate

countries

as an unnecessary waste of money. In conclusion, financial assistance is the way to sustain political and economic attitudes

although

it has cons

such

as relying on

others

in any situation,but taking into account its advantages in terms of politics, it is better to maintain each other.

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