Some people believe that watching TV and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by reading books. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

In today's technology world, there are multiple modes of entertainment,
few
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of them are watching tv and playing computer
games
. I wholeheartedly
concour
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concur
with the above statement
,
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and will elaborate
further
in the
next
paragraphs.
To begin
with, it's a trend where children
spends
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most of their
time
watching Idiot Box or playing
games
on tablets.
This
has a severe impact on individual health. Parents can restrict them, and indulge them in reading
books
like
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fiction
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books
and stories.
This
would help them in building many things, wherein they can increase their vocabulary,
understand
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and understand
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how to make complex sentences. They can
also
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'
congitive
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cognitive
' thinking.
For example
,
initially
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I forced my child to spend
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a good
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time
on
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reading
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the reading
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newspaper
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newspapers
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,
special
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and special
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editorial
page
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pages
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.
Initially
, it was difficult for her to read and memorize complex words,
however
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but
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with
time
, she developed skills in understanding emotional aspects of the article, and had a good impact on their vocabulary. Moreso, youngsters who
are indulged
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themselves in violent
games
,
they
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apply
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start adopting
violence
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traits in their personality, which has a severe impact on their mental health.
For example
,one child known to me, played
PUBG
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a PUBG
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game regularly, due to which he started fighting with classmates, and a point came where he was expelled from the school because of his
voilence
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violence
violent
behaviour.
On the other hand
, if his parents
initially
forced him to spend the rest of his
time
on
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musicals
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or stories
books
,
than
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then
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his behaviour would be soft and generous. It is rightly said by one scientist in his research paper, that
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a child
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child
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brain
explode
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with ideas and thoughts, and
this
is developed through reading
books
and articles. To conclude
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, in my opinion, parents
initially
had to
forced
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their children in developing
habits
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the habits
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of reading
books
,
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and restrict them to watch idiot
box
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boxes
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or playing computer
games
.
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  • leisure time
  • passive entertainment
  • active mental engagement
  • foster
  • complex concepts
  • screen time
  • concentration and focus
  • counterargument
  • cognitive development
  • problem-solving skills
  • balanced approach
  • diverse media landscape
  • multi-modal learning
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