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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I partially agree with the opinion that technology has made man more social. My reasoning for
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 is three-fold;
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 being the ability to contact anyone across the globe using social
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,
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 the ease at which
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 is done due to the wide availability of communication devices
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 as phones, laptops, iPads and so on.
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, the decrease in cost over the past two decades has made
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 luxury available to the middle and lower classes in developed countries and
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 even to the poor in some developing countries. The combination of the 3 factors above means that communication with family and
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 who live away can be easy and cheap, as appose to the expensive telephone bills of the past, especially international calls.
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, apps
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 as Facebook and WhatsApp allow the spread of news to a large number of
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 with ease and planning of functions, events and conferences can be done without the hassle of old.
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,
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 with peculiar hobbies and interests that may not be able to make
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 as easily in the past have the ability to find
friends
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 with similar interests using the above-mentioned apps.
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 point can
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 be made for online dating, helping
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 who haven't found their significant other the old-fashioned way, to connect with a wide range of candidates. On the flip side,
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 can make an argument for the opposite.
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 is due to the fact that social
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 if used incorrectly, can cause
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 to become isolated and separated and not feel the need to socialise in person. A person can easily find themselves lost in the vast ocean of the internet and neglect society as we know it.
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 can be said for today's generation, who are more interested in TikTok than playing outside, a shame in my opinion. In conclusion, I think social
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 is
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 of man's greatest achievements and has brought the world together in
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 place. It has made communication and socialising extremely easy, made it possible to find
people
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 that share common interests to be
friends
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 with or even to share a life with.
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, as is the case with everything, misuse of social
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 can actually make
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 more antisocial and isolated.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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