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As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Since the arrival of electronic inventions,
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 lifestyles have dramatically changed. Less physical activities were required to
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 daily tasks, which has brought numerous
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 but crafted several
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 impacts
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 health as well.
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 most credible organization,' The Lancet', that has been induced by the above phenomenon. Diabetes, which was once considered merely a regional disease, has been posing
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 globally annually over the past few decades. Medical scientists and human behaviour observators have found out that lack of physical activities has become a predominant threat to our endocrine and digestive
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. Workers,
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particularly
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 in developed countries, spend most of their time working
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.
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, it is widely claimed that it is virtually impossible for them to have time doing
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exercise
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exercise
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 has brought countless people on the verge of gaining diabetes. Another salient example is cardiovascular diseases
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 as high blood pressure. It may not be an immediate threat to our
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;
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, from a long-term perspective, it could be deadly.
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