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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuel should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#exploration #development #alternatives #fuel #priority
Non- renewable
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Non-renewable
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 energy
sources
such
 as coal, oil and natural gas are increasingly becoming indispensable in the
day to day
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 running of our lives. The research and advancement of safe substitutes
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 fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 should be an essential focus in our world today.
This
 essay will completely agree that replacing fossil
fuel
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 with renewable energy
sources
 should be the most principal priority in our global world.
To begin
 with, our modern world depends on fossil
fuels
 in our homes, vehicles and businesses. They are
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 source
for
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production
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the production
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 of electricity, functional in running vehicles and for cooking in houses. Even though fossil
fuels
 are
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cost effective
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 and readily available, safe alternatives should be of primary concern. The major reason why we need to start taking into consideration alternative
sources
 is that we will soon run out of fossil
fuels
 since they are not renewable. Economic sectors
such
 as transportation, health, manufacturing,
electricity
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and electricity
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 just to mention a few,
operates
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 solely on
this
non- renewable
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non-renewable
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sources
 of power,
running
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and running
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 out on them will definitely have a negative impact on
the
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society resulting in unemployment, poor healthcare service delivery, food shortage, inability to generate
power
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the power
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 needed for daily routine. It is
therefore
 vital for government and
scientist
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scientists
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 to replace fossil
fuels
 so that our lives can be meaningful when these
sources
 are depleted.
In addition
, another reason is that fossil
fuels
 pollute the environment. They are probably the major contributor to global warming which is one of the biggest
threat
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 to humanity because of the increased heat, climate change and drought to the society which affects food production and human health. The need for renewable and cleaner energy
sources
 can
therefore
 not be overemphasized. In conclusion, it is obvious that our entire life is at risk,
therefore
 in my opinion I definitely agree that replacing fossil
fuels
 should be the top
most
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priority globally.

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