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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some governments and private companies spend a vast amount of money on
space
 programs. There are several opinions about investing in
space
 exploration, and it is often criticized as
wasteful
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 and useless
activities
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. I believe that the investment in
space
 explorations is
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high and crazy funding of money and people’s time, but it is a growing trend. There are lots of negative arguments about those prominent projects
,
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 because some huge companies prefer to invest millions of dollars in equipment and tools for outer
space
 explorations, while we still do not know what is in there, at the bottom of the sea,
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. There are lots of opportunities out there, with those
space
 missions and their new technologies and scientific findings, to be developed, but for some
people
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 it seems unfair that governments are spending billions of dollars to send people into
space
 when basic Earth problems still exist, and we aren’t able to prevent them. Despite
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all the disadvantages, those
space
 explorations might contribute to the ending of poverty or might be the response to a better way to deal with lifelong illnesses but searching for them is like looking for a needle in a haystack. Exploring those questions outside the Earth might cost us all arms and legs. In conclusion, most
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the
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people are
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 and curious about what they might find out there. The unknown could seem dangerous, but one thing is for sure,
space
 exploration is our future, it will continue developing and becoming more usual and affordable.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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