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Computers are widely used in education and teachers now play a less important role in the classroom than ever before. Do you agree or disagree?

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computers
 are playing a good role these days in
education
 especially,but the teachers are an important item in
education
.In my opinion, teachers are playing a good part in
education
 certainly the
computers
 use more by the
student
 ,but The teacher is important well. The two disadvantages of
computers
 in
education
 are addiction and don'
t
 receive information completely.
Firstly
, if the
students
 overuse
computers
,they might be addicted, so I don'
t
 mind in used
computers
 in
education
, but we must limit specific time every day. To illustrate, In 2003 India achavimet the
first rate
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because it uses
computers
 in teaching their
students
.
Moreover
, they can use it to find an exam and documents,
for example
 when the
student
 has an exam, he can search for information belong
this
 object. In the end , computer overuse caused addiction.
Secondly
, There is a difference between
education
 through
computers
 and tutors. What is the difference between them
.
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For example
, when the teacher explains the lecture
face
 to
face
 to
students
. They will understand the lesson 100 per cent .
Furthermore
 , when the
student
 teaches through Microsoft teams. I am sure most of the
students
 don'
t
 understand the lesson, For illustrate if the
student
 doesn'
t
 understand the object in the lesson, He can ask a teacher about it to repeat it. In conclusion teaching
face
 to
face
 is better than teaching through the Internet In conclusion, addiction and not receiving information completely are two disadvantages of teaching with
computers
,
although
 we must to teaching in two ways.
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  • personalized guidance
  • interactive learning
  • e-learning platforms
  • adaptive learning technologies
  • individualized learning
  • emotional support
  • motivation
  • social development
  • teamwork
  • emotional intelligence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • discussion
  • debate
  • real-time feedback
  • technological limitations
  • digital divide
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