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Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible?

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Anti-social behaviour is a wide range of unacceptable attitudes that some individuals do against other
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, ranging from annoying to committing a crime. Some
people
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 believe that society is responsible for
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 essay will discuss the two main causes behind antisocialism and who is responsible. There are two main reasons among many other reasons behind the eruption of antisocial
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. A broken family is the
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 important cause. Children, who experienced unstable social life, tend to have antisocial
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 against other
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, and by growing up with
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, they start harassing others and may end up committing a crime. The
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 important reason is some antisocial political groups, spread hate speech and urge young individuals to do unlawful
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 under the pretext of patriotism, Many antisocial
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 have been seen in many countries in the
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 few years under
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 umbrella. Regarding who is responsible for these antisocial
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. I believe that it is a shared responsibility for all; families, local authorities, schools, and governments. Parents should take care of their children, and teach them how important peaceful coexistence is and how serious intolerance is.
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, local authorities and schools should incorporate their residents and students into more social
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, which motivate
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 to coexist peacefully.
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, governments should impose deterrence punishments against antisocial
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 and support all social events. In conclusion, broken families and antisocial political groups are the main two important causes of antisocial behaviour and the responsibility for these
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 rests on local authorities, families, governments, and schools.
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