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Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible?

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Anti-social behaviour is a wide range of unacceptable attitudes that some individuals do against other
people
, ranging from annoying to committing a crime. Some
people
 believe that society is responsible for
this
.
This
 essay will discuss the two main causes behind antisocialism and who is responsible. There are two main reasons among many other reasons behind the eruption of antisocial
behaviours
. A broken family is the
first
 important cause. Children, who experienced unstable social life, tend to have antisocial
activities
 against other
people
, and by growing up with
this
, they start harassing others and may end up committing a crime. The
second
 important reason is some antisocial political groups, spread hate speech and urge young individuals to do unlawful
activities
 under the pretext of patriotism, Many antisocial
behaviours
 have been seen in many countries in the
last
 few years under
this
 umbrella. Regarding who is responsible for these antisocial
behaviours
. I believe that it is a shared responsibility for all; families, local authorities, schools, and governments. Parents should take care of their children, and teach them how important peaceful coexistence is and how serious intolerance is.
Furthermore
, local authorities and schools should incorporate their residents and students into more social
activities
, which motivate
people
 to coexist peacefully.
Moreover
, governments should impose deterrence punishments against antisocial
activities
 and support all social events. In conclusion, broken families and antisocial political groups are the main two important causes of antisocial behaviour and the responsibility for these
behaviours
 rests on local authorities, families, governments, and schools.
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