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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others believe it is a waste of money since people can access the internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both and give your opinion?

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I would prefer to study time in a
libarary
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library
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instead
 of
the
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 private
place
,
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of
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, spending time
on
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 the library have many
beneficial
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 for me
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such
sucha
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such
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discipline
dicipline
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discipline
on
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 my reading ,high attention on my task with my classmates because I must ignore unwanted notification from social
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media
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medias
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 and control my behaviour for distracting other people that have come to
this
place
 for studying ,while the private space
make
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 you lethargic and unmotivated . Considering places for constructing a library
have
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 a great impression on students
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because
becuse
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because
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on
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there and meet their teachers ,so the ability for sharing information
in
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 different topics has been increasing ,alongside, studying in
a
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 inspirational
place
 as a library has
growing
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 in habit of studying . To summarize,
government
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the government
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 must invest
on
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building
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 that
are
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 assigned to study because
,
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these
place
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 have increased
habit
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 of
study
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 with more
concentrate
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 and
providing
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provide
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 a
place
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sharing
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 information.
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