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Nowadays, it seems that people tend to waste a great amount of food. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

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modern
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uses
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 a huge amount of vegetables, meat and fish
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to their curiosity to invent new things.Today,
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 would like to have a chat with all of you about the two sides that happen to the world lately. In general,
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 who have a lot of money tend to make
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even more profit to be renown themselves to society by making an unknown gadget and invention using
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 of material and including the uses of
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.
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 whose job related the
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 like the cook so you want to popular your restaurant by serving new
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 and by having
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 of
food
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 you will have to test like hundred thousand of time to have a new recipe for the
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.For
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 who like to popular their channel to a whole new
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 they can have a competition show to increase to
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 of
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viewer
wiewer
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 for their own channel.For
people
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 like the best cook Gardon Ramsay wasting the supply of
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 for the future of new spectacular
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beneficial
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 for him and his job. Differently, wasting a large of
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the invent a new thing is a good thing but nothing can keep making
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 without a drawback. Losing
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 we are making ourselves harder in
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 a place where a supply of
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 is permanent. We are going to make a natural
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 like
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,
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 or even
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 and the extinction of many well-known species if we
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 going like
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. In conclusion,
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 should organize more and control the amount of
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 for
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food
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 so we can keep going without any
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 in our path
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 future.
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