Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reduce accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views.

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In today's era, the populations have different views about
road
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safety. A number of people claim that punishment should be given strictly to decrease driving offences.
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others assume that a range of other actions should be taken at the same time.
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with, these days growing populations and vehicles on
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road
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lead to so many
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accidents. So, strict punishment should be given to drivers if they drive in a bad
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.
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, there is should be high penalties should be taken on drivers who drive in a dangerous
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and break the traffic
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like not using
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seat belt when driving. It will set an example for automobile holders that they could be panelized if they cross
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limits as fines and prison sentences. if
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can be done in a good
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it will result in driving
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discipline and they will follow shipment
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more accurately.
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, travel accidents can be stopped by some precautions. first and foremost schools should teach traffic
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from
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primary classes which will surely help them to be a good driver in the
coming
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future.
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addition, the government should set up highway design in a better
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. like, they can set up good safety marks on the edge of the
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which motivates people to drive safely and with the radium warning signs they should be aware of speed breakers and diversions.
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but not
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least, there should be some training classes should be held before giving a driving license to people.
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, in
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countries, drivers need to pass specific examinations about traffic and driving
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to get eligible for a license.
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, it is believed that hard punishment can prevent bad driving on highways.
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, improvement in pathway signs and training classes before issuing the license can
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help to shrink
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accidents.
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task response
Ensure that the essay addresses all parts of the prompt and provides a clear opinion and supporting points for both views.
coherence cohesion
The essay shows a logical progression and good use of linking words. However, consider organizing the ideas more coherently within paragraphs for a smoother flow of information.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Strict punishment
  • Driving offences
  • Accidents
  • Deterrent
  • Reckless driving
  • Penalties
  • Fines
  • License suspension
  • Imprisonment
  • Law and order
  • Potential offenders
  • Fear
  • Education
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Mindset
  • Safe driving habits
  • Infrastructure
  • Traffic management systems
  • Licensing procedures
  • Testing procedures
  • Skilled drivers
  • Public transportation
  • Carpooling
  • Vehicles
  • Advanced safety technologies
  • Enhance
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