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It is important for people to take risks both in their professional lives and their personal lives do you think the advantage of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives #advantage
Those successful businessmen always mention "take
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" in interviews and speeches to accentuate the qualities that lead to success but in my opinion the merits of taking
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 and can away its drawbacks in both professional and personal aspects only if it is legal to take and if we have the ability to deal with consequences brought by failures. It is said that by taking
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 we tend to make progress and
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 dilemmas in the professional aspect,
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, we may resign to start up our own business or study abroad. As for personal life, we may invest our savings in stocks or try some extreme sports. In those cases,if we end up with the best results, we may be rewarded with fortune wonderful experiences and knowledge.
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 the results are always unpredictable as many enterprises shut down many people went bankrupt and the worst, lost their lives. we should always think twice and make a self-evaluation before taking
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. As many
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 about being successful by taking
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, they often overestimate themselves. They abandon their responsibilities as a family member and a member of society,
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 commit crimes. Since the
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 immoral and even illegal,they eventually failed at achieving their goals. It is true that taking
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 sometimes leads to failure and results in
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.
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 mindset and maximum effort, the benefits can still outweigh the flaws and we can benefit from it not only physically but
also
 mentally.
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