Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.

Globally more men and women are opting
for
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work from
home
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whilst
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while
many students going for distance learning due to technology
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become affordable and easily accessible.
This
essay will explore the advantages and disadvantages of the development.
Firstly
,
i
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will discuss
positive
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the positive
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impact that many
adults
working from
home
and
secondly
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I will discuss the negative impacts of more
children
studying from their houses. Work from
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are
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advantegeous
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advantageous
for
adults
as they have time for their family and
also
can enjoy homely food. As people stay
home
, they will be less stressed and worried about their parents.
For instance
,
adults
can take care of their
family
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and spend quality time.
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people can
also
save more money by staying at
home
. As it limits the expenditure on households, where they save a lot on unnecessary spending.
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,
instead
of having two
household
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spending, it will reduce by living in 1
home
. Technological developments have
ruiend
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ruined
the childhood of a boy or girl as more
children
are opting for
home schooling
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.
This
affects
children
's social and
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physical
phycial
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physical
growth in future.
For example
,
children
become more homesick and weak.
Moreover
,
children
face a lot of
conceqences
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consequences
interacting in large
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crowed
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places.
For instance
, if
child
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wants to pursue
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degree which
the
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course
emphasis
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on social bonding
its
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difficult for
children
to cope
up
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with
studies
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their studies
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. To conclude, vast advancement in
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technology
techonolgy
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technology
has led to serious problems in
children
, whereas
adults
find it positive.
Hence
developments are disadvantageous for
children
which affects
childhood
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of
children
.
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