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we should improve the types of vehicles. Do you agree or not?

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Introduction
A machine with an engine
that is
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 used to take
people
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 or things from
one
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place
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 to another
place
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,
such
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 as a car, bus or lorry.
Body paragraph 1
In the past, there were not any
vehicles
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.
People
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 could not
travel
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 from
one
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place
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 to another
place
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 easily,
for example
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, they wanted to
travel
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 from
one
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place
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 to another
place
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 maybe somebody stole their money days that the weather was snowy, they could not
travel
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 easily with their animals. In fa,ct in the past there was not any pollution so the air was clean. There were fewer respiratory diseasthantn today.
Body paragraph 2
Today if we want to
travel
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 from
one
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place
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 to another
place
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, we will
travel
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 easily
for example
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 in the past if
people
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 wanted to
travel
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 from Iran to England by their animal, it could
last
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one
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 year. now we can
use
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 an aeroplane for travelling from Iran to England, maybe it
last
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 2 hours. Today we can arrive at our destination earlier than in the past. As you know
vehicles
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 do not have security but I am sure in the future
people
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 will create them very well.
Conclusion
To wrap up my speech if we
use
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vehicles
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 very well, they are very good. We do not have to
use
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vehicles
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 every time, sometimes it is better that we walk to our destination and we should
use
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 - fewer cars so it is very excellent that we
use
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 public transport.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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