The charts show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The given line graphs illustrate the number of

households

that own technological devices ( washing

machine

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machines

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refrigerator

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refrigerators

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vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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) and

hours

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the hours

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spent on housework.

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, in 1920 people spent exactly 50

hours

for

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doing

works

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work

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home

, but in 2019 when the percentage of

households

with new technologies increased, the number of working

hours

home

declined to 10

hours

per week.

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the

beginning

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no one

holded

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hold

refrigerator

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a refrigerator

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home

and only 30% and 40% of them had

vacuum

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a vacuum

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cleaner and washing

machine

respectively. After 40 years the percentage of

households

with

refrigerator

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refrigerators

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soared to 90% and reached the highest point. Owners of washing

machine

and

vacuum

cleaner moderately

rised

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rose

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to 70%. At the same

time

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people spent 30

hours

less

for

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housework than at the start From 1960 to 2019 the percentage of

households

who keep

refrigerator

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refrigerators

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and

vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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levelled off and reached 100%

percent

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per cent

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while

owners of washing

machine

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machines

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slightly increased

for

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5%.

Hours

spent

for

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apply

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doing

works

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work

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home

between 1960 and 2019

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decreased

dcreased

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decreased

for

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hours

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, machine, refrigerator, vacuum, hours, home with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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6Word repetition
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ownership
electrical appliances
housework
time frame
variables
trends
significant milestones
turning points
correlation
reduction
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The charts show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problems does this create? What can be done to tackle this.

Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives?

In today’s society people tend to buy many things and throw them away even though they can still be used. What are some causes of this behaviour? What are some effects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.