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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are best teachers?

#parents #teachers
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According to Hindu culture,
parents
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 and
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teacher
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 are treated as
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god
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,
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 I wholeheartedly concur with the above statement, and will elaborate
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 in
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next
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 paragraphs. To start with,
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 ,
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 always remain with their
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 all the
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 teachers worked in a closed environment and remain with students for a limited duration.
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teacher
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teach
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 their students about social science and share best practices with them, and moved to the
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 chapter in the
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 class, but
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 do much of the practical work with their ward, like greet everybody whom they are interacting with, and get a scold from their
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 if they are not following them.
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, I always ask my daughter to greet everyone whom we are meeting
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and now she develop a habit of it.
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Furthermore
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, teachers taught at their students about a topic, explain
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things clearly,
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 it again and again until and unless every student is not clear with the topic. Some subjects are interesting,
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 some are difficult to understand. At home,
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 always act as a
teacher
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 for
there
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children
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. They spend a good
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 with them and clear their doubts, despite they have other work to do.
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, during my school
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,I was weak in maths and I tried my best to absorb all the things during the classroom session,but I usually forgot
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things easily.My father helped me a lot in developing my understanding while managing his work during
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business hours. To conclude, in my
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parents
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 played a vital role in grooming their
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then
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a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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.
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 main focus is always on their wards, whereas
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teacher
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 had to focus on every
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children
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 within
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 limited
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 period,
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 teachers cannot able to understand which student is lacking in which area.
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