In an era of globalization, some people think that studying abroad is the best way to attain a well-paid job while others believe other options are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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world is moving forward and everything is getting globalization, and globalization of
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advantage
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of studying abroad will give them a bright
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future
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and good
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opportunity
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opportunities
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while other
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believe that you can still have
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career even if you
study
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own
country
. On the one hand,
people
choosing
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choose
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studying
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to study
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abroad for
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a better
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career
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careers
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and opportunities for different reasons.
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, they can
study
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course
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courses
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of their interest and it will give them
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opportunity
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opportunities
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in
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the global
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market
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, it will give them a better pay scale because they can
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market
easily. For
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, there are some
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courses which are not available in their
country
and it is
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high
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heigh
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demand
in
other
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another country
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country
, by studying abroad one can
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access
to
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heigh
demand
course
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courses
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and get
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a well-paid
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job
.
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,
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people
believe that
,
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studying abroad is the only option to
access
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the global
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market
and pursue
good
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a good
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career. They can
study
what are the
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in-demand
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in
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in-demand
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demand
stream in their
country
and
study
that, it will
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give them better
job
opportunity
,
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also
depend on the one's skill level. if they have
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skill
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then
, they can still
access
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the global
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mark
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and manage to get
job
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a job
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.
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student
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students
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who
study
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studies
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in
there
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their
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own
country
are
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is
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able to get jobs
in
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abroad and settle down there. In my opinion, Studying abroad or in
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country
is not much
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, But
right
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skills are necessary to get
better
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a better
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feature
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features
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.
However
, Studying abroad will give you
slightly
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more chance to get a good
job
because they already
study
in
other
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another
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country
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countries
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and have
access
to
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the there
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there
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their
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local
market
. To conclude, studying
advance
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courses
in
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apply
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abroad
give
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opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
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to
access
heigh
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high
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demand
job
easily, while if someone
have
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profound talent
then
it
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dose
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does
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not
matter
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matters
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they
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if they
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study
local or abroad, they can still give
job
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a job
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globally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Exposure
  • Educational systems
  • Career opportunities
  • Cutting-edge technology
  • Soft skills
  • Adaptability
  • Communication
  • Cultural understanding
  • Multinational companies
  • Networking opportunities
  • International internships
  • Global work readiness
  • Cost-prohibitive
  • Local university programs
  • Practical work experience
  • Vocational training
  • Specialized certification programs
  • High-demand industries
  • Qualifications
  • Job markets
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