In an era of globalization, some people think that studying abroad is the best way to attain a well-paid job while others believe other options are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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world is moving forward and everything is getting globalization, and globalization of Add an article
The entire
study
is
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also becomes
has also become
also
become very common. Many people
think,
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apply
advantage
of studying abroad will give them a bright Add an article
the advantage
an advantage
feature
and good Correct your spelling
future
job
opportunity
while other Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
people
believe that you can still have good
career even if you Add an article
a good
study
in you
own Change the pronoun
your
country
.
On the one hand, people
choosing
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choose
studying
abroad for Change the verb form
to study
better
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a better
career
and opportunities for different reasons. Fix the agreement mistake
careers
First
, they can study
advance
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advanced
course
of their interest and it will give them Fix the agreement mistake
courses
better
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a better
opportunity
in Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
global
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the global
market
. Second
, it will give them a better pay scale because they can access
global
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the global
market
easily. For instant
, there are some Add an article
an instant
advance
courses which are not available in their Replace the word
advanced
country
and it is Correct your spelling
high
heigh
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high
demand
in other
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another country
other countries
country
, by studying abroad one can then
can access
to
heigh Change preposition
apply
demand
course
and get Fix the agreement mistake
courses
well-paid
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a well-paid
job
.
On the other hand
, Many
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many
people
believe that,
studying abroad is the only option to Remove the comma
apply
access
global
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the global
market
and pursue good
career. They can Add an article
a good
study
what are the Add a hyphen
in-demand
in
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in-demand
demand
stream in their country
and study
that, it will also
give them better job
opportunity
, moreover
, it is
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apply
also
depend on the one's skill level. if they have right
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the right
a right
skill
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skills
then
, they can still access
global
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the global
mark
and manage to get Fix the agreement mistake
marks
job
. Add an article
a job
the job
For example
, Many student
who Change to a plural noun
students
study
in Change the verb form
studies
there
own Replace the word
their
country
are
able to get jobs Change the verb form
is
in
abroad and settle down there.
In my opinion, Studying abroad or in Change preposition
apply
own
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my own
country
is not much matter
, But Correct article usage
a matter
right
skills are necessary to get Correct article usage
the right
better
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a better
the better
feature
. Fix the agreement mistake
features
However
, Studying abroad will give you slightly
more chance to get a good Correct article usage
a slightly
job
because they already study
in other
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another
country
and have Fix the agreement mistake
countries
access
to Add an article
the there
there
local Correct your spelling
their
market
.
To conclude, studying advance
courses Replace the word
advanced
in
abroad Change preposition
apply
give
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gives
opportunity
to Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
access
heigh
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high
demand
job
easily, while if someone have
profound talent Change the verb form
has
then
it Change the verb form
doses
dose
not Correct your spelling
does
matter
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matters
they
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if they
study
local or abroad, they can still give job
globally.Correct article usage
a job
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