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Government are spending too much money on a space research while there are still lots of problems on earth to what extent you agree or disagree ??

#government #money #space #research #lots #earth
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Nowdays
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 countries are competing with each other
on
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space
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research
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 where countries are spending billions of dollars on satellites
to
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 extra terrestrial exploration. I wholeheartedly agree with the above statement that on earth human is facing critical problems
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then
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than
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space
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 exploration, and I will elaborate
further
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 in the
next
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 paragraphs. To start with,
government
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 and private organisations
spending
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 billions $ on
space
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research
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 programs,including exploring other planets,to show technical
superority
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superiority
 over other countries ,
however
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 neglecting local or global
issues
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.If a portion of
a
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taxpayer
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 money
spent
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 on local/global problems,those
issues
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 can be resolved
easily
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more easily
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 than
anticipated
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an anticipated
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 time period.Some global
issues
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 are
water
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 pollution,global warming and depleting sweet
water
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 resources. In India, the biggest challenge is drinking
water
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,though the country is surrounded by
water
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 from three sides.If the
government
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 spends
quarter
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a quarter
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 portion of the funds allocated to a
space
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research
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 program,
this
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 problem could be resolved easily by
research
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 and developing clean technology
of
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 converting salty
water
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 to
a
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sweet
water
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,
world
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the world
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 is facing serious challenges
on
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with
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 carbon
emission
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emissions
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 impacting weather and
environment
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the environment
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.Nowadays,
main
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 source of energy is coming
through
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from
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 fossil fuels.If the whole world closely
work
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 on
this
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 challenge
,
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 and spend half of the
world
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 budget allocated to extra-terrestrial exploration in finding alternative green energy,
than
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this
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 problem could be resolved easily.New horizons can be opened in finding alternative
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gas guzzling
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 machines to
efficient
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an efficient
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 green
source
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sources
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 of energy for private and public transportation.
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, green hydrogen could be alternative
of
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 fossil fuels,but
current
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the current
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challenges
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challenge
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 is extracting hydrogen
molecule
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molecules
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 from H2O.
Government
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 can spend more on researching,exploring and developing green technology to extract it. To conclude, in my opinion,
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government
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the government
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 should create
vision
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a vision
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 document around local/ global challenges
,
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 and redirect allocated funds from
space
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research
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 to resolve local/global
issues
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term survival
  • Scientific understanding
  • Technological advances
  • Earthly benefits
  • Pressing issues
  • Climate change
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • Balanced approach
  • Geopolitical stability
  • Space exploration
  • Space research
  • International cooperation
  • Priority
  • Immediate issues
  • Global challenges
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