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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believethat they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Many people contend that university students should be allowed to
study
 whatever they wish to. While, Many argue that they should
study
 subjects that might help them to brighten their future,
such
 as technology and science.
However
, I believe in the initial one.
This
 essay discusses both sides with explanations and arguments.
To begin
 with,
initially
, students should be allowed to
study
 according to their
wish
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.
In other words
, if they may be given chance to
study
 whatever they are interested in, they can Excell in a particular field,
therefore
, bright career.
Moreover
, individual satisfaction is much more predominant. If they are given a free hand to choose a course on what they are interested in, they make future from that. Even though, it may not make much money they will be self-satisfied. In
such
 a case, though, they may not successful, but they do not regret it as it's their own decision.
On the other hand
,Not all students are interested in science and technology, if they are forced to take the course, despite
of
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their enthusiasm for science and technology, it might be a waste of one's valuable time as well as resources.
For instance
, some parents will force their children to take academics, if those children may obey their parents and does the same, they may seem mechanical in future,
besides
 making more money,As a consequence cannot give their best. To recapitulate, I believe in self-choice. Self-satisfaction is greater than wages. So, one can reach higher positions, if given a free hand. Many scientists stepped into their professional leaving behind huge remuneration in fields they are not interested in.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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