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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is believed that universities must accept a balanced enrollment of
males
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 and
females
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 in every subject. From my perspective,
gender
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 should not play a significant role in passing to college and all
students
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 must be evaluated considering only their capability.
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 of all, all the universities make entrance
exams
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 in order to accept estimate the level of applicant
students
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. Indeed, all tests or
exams
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 are the same for all
males
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 as well as
females
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.
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, their admission to college is totally dependent on their scores in
exams
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 rather than their
gender
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.
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, if more representatives of
males
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 got good grades,
then
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 more
males
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 will be enrolled. In my opinion,
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 will be a more honest and correct way of selecting
students
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.
On the other hand
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, it is believed that women had witnessed discrimination in society.
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, many representatives of the female class suppose that women should not feel pressured during university admission. The idea of accepting equal numbers of
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 and
females
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 is to promote
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 equality which has been a serious problem for many years.
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, it is worth mentioning the fact that the capability and interests of
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 vary regarding the subject.
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, the number of male
students
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 in IT courses is notably higher, at the same time more female
students
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 could be seen in courses of medicine or pedagogy.Incidentally, despite these facts that it is a good opportunity to show and prove their merit and capability for both
males
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 and
females
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. All in all, I suppose that
students
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 must be enrolled on colleges regarding their academic performance during entrance
exams
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 ,not their
gender
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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