Some people say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The cultural

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traditions

play

significant

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role in people’s lives.

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, it is agreed that

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them is very important for everybody and

first

of all for the young generation.

However

, two opinions

are existed

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about the influence of using local rituals as money-making attractions aimed at

tourist

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tourists

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. Some people say that it destroys it, others say

this

is the only way to save

such

traditions

. We will discuss both sides of

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arguments

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before making any conclusion.

Firstly

, a lot of cultural

traditions

were based on

local

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the local

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mode of life and oriented on

resident

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the resident

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population, but impression hunters can change them.

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, the food in the restaurants in touristic places was dramatically changed and international cuisines are substituting the local

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.

Thus

, we can see how national customs disappearing in the modern world.

Therefore

, we can say

that cultural

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that cultural tradition

those cultural traditions

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traditions

could be destroyed by tourists.

Nevertheless

, many things were saved only because of using them as money-making attractions.

For instance

, the Maya culture had been almost forgotten until the pyramids were discovered in the Yucatan jungles. It brought tourists to the place and gave a new wave of interest to the local cultural

traditions

.

As a result

, many of them were saved for

the

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future generations. To sum up,

both

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from both

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points of view we can see that there is no one united opinion

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due to the complexity of the problem. I'm more inclined to the point of view that tourism

in general

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, in general,

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helps to preserve cultural

traditions

. But the

humanity

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human

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still needs to find

a

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the

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right balance between

generation

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the generation

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of money and the local value

safety

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of safety

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.