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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #country #culture #import #movies #tv #programmes
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 of their own and
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opinions
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 by emotion and feeling about
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type
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 of movies and TV programmes being shown outside or not.Today,
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 will discuss
about
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the two sides
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 to the situation we are having here. The advantage of watching your
favorite
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 entertainment outside is very convenient for a lot of
peoples
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people
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 because they can have a better
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of
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time in their own life without
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interrupted
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interupted
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another
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 work.
Secondly
,
people
 can always keep on track of the news happening a lot
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 like
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,
world
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 cup or comedy
show
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shows
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.
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, it is beneficial to believe entertainment being lives to the whole
world
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another, the quality of the product,
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 trust of the user.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that nothing in
this
world
 is only a benefit without a single disadvantage.Like
people
 with a personality is caring for the tradition only want their own product in their country to be a live legend
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 their own without the knowledge of the
people
 outside.
For example
, Donald Trump is being renowned as a traditional person who wants only the product of his country to his without the need
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for
ofor
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for
 other things. To summarise, the main point is showing the outside the entertainment of the country have benefit and disadvantage.I mostly want to believe that movies and TV should show and spread around the
world
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • enriches
  • diverse perspectives
  • storytelling methods
  • spur creativity
  • innovation
  • genres
  • styles
  • over-reliance
  • undermine
  • overshadow
  • cultural homogenization
  • national identity
  • local talent
  • linguistic relevance
  • relatable
  • accessible
  • domestic audience
  • preserve
  • cultural identity
  • promote
  • balanced approach
  • cultural landscape
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