Some people believe that improve public health should increase the number of sports facilities, others believe that it has little effect and need other measure to improve it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that improve public health should increase the number of sports facilities, others believe that it has little effect and need other measure to improve it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Travelling in a group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

Even though governments have worked hard to bring about improvements in the healthcare system, the overall standard of physical health in developed countries is decreasing. What are the potential reasons for this, and what are some of the long- term effects?