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The gap between the rich and poor is widening in many countries. What problems can this cause, and what can be done to reduce the gap?

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In today's ,world developing countries are facing a major problem where richer is getting richer and richer but
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 poor people are becoming poorer
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 is because of multiple reasons like inflation lets us see some of the reasons causing the problem in the following paragraph. To start the prices of goods are being increased monthly or yearly at the same time the taxes on products are
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 been increased due to
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 inflation is growing rapidly
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 when I was a child I use to get ice cream for 10 rupees but nowadays it's hard to even get a cone ice cream for the same price here we can see how badly the prices have increased
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 there has been an implementation of taxes on ice creams
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 point increases in pay of education the fare of
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 sector have boomed so much that to get a quality of education parents are spending lakhs of rupees
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 my parents got a quality study in free of cost but today for my studies they are spending lakhs of rupees in
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 situation rich can bear the amount but poor people can't afford the money to solve the issue people there needs to be no discrimination in education that means every child needs to get a quality of study at a fair price or at free of cost. To conclude the richer will become richer until the distribution of wealth is unequal to do so the taxes for the poor need to be reduced and the income of every employee needs to be equal in the sense everyone sustains the economy
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 the wealth must be distributed by the government to poor in the terms of schemes etc by
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 the economy grows as well as the gap between rich and poor will reduce.
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