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Some people believe that rich countries should provide poor countries with help that is not financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The two maps illustrate the significant changes in a manufacturing
area
 and a plan of future development in the town, called
Norbition
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Norbiton
. Overall, it can be seen that the city of Norbiton will be turned from
industrial
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an industrial
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area
 into a residential community with many local facilities. At
this
 moment, the southern side of the river is the
area
 that has a number of factories
which
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located in all
area
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areas
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 of the town especially, they
are constructed
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 around the roundabout and two sides of the road.
Moreover
, on the other side of the town is the farmland. In the future plan, considerable changes will take place in
this
area
 as the plants will be demolished while the number of housing and public structures including shops, medical
center
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centers
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,
playground
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playgrounds
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 and
school
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schools
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, increased.
In addition
, the government will construct the extension of the new railroad which
linked
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 to the bridge across the river to expand more housing
area
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areas
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 from the south
area
 to the north and they will decrease the
area
 of
the
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agriculture just only the northeastern side of the river.
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