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Crime & Punishment Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both of these two views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#crime #punishment #people #type #circumstances #motivation #account #two
There is no doubt that there is no
punishment
can
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in
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what
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a victim
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victim
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victims
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feel
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feels
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,
such
 as
a
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apply
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trauma or even life. Some people do believe that
pinishment
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punishment
 must be fixed for each type of
crime
,
on the other hand
, others argue that
circumtances
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circumstances
 of an individual
crime
, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the
punishment
. I do agree that
punishment
 must
be fix
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 for each type of
crime
instead
 to search the background of the
crime
.
Nowdays
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,
crime
become
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becomes
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 more and more,
such
a
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as a
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kill,
a
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apply
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rape, a
rob
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robbing
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 or a
coruption
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corruption
.
This
 time,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 has a lot of division to stand the right,
such
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as a
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a
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apply
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police or a
court
.
Furthermore
,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
also
 make
a tons
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a ton
tons
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 of regulation, detailing
in
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apply
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what type of
crime
also
 the
punishment
.
For
example
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 when we saw a
court
in
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on
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 television, it takes
some
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a
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 couple of days until the
punishment
 will decide.
This
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depends
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depend
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ondepend
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 the
proves
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proof
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 during the
court
.
Additionally
, there are no fixed
punisment
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punishment
 in
court
,
for
instance
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 there is a
coruptor
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corruptor
 that
take
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takes
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of
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people's money, the number almost two
trillions
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 rupiah. The
coruptor
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corruptor
 was decided to
in
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be in
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 jail for 5 years.
On the other hand
, there is a nanny who
steal
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steals
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 three plates from her boss, the price just a hundred thousand
ruppiah
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rupiah
. The
the
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court
was
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decided the nanny
to
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go in jail for three years. Some people say
,
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apply
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 it can happen because the boss
pay
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pays
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 a
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professional
proffesional
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professional
 lawyer.
This
 case can explain
in
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apply
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how justice always
have
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has
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circumtances
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circumstances
, it depends
how
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on how
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 good
lawyer
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a lawyer
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 we can pay.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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