Crime & Punishment Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both of these two views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no doubt that there is no
punishment
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replace
in
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what
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a victim
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victim
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victims
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feel
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,
such
as
a
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trauma or even life. Some people do believe that
pinishment
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punishment
must be fixed for each type of
crime
,
on the other hand
, others argue that
circumtances
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circumstances
of an individual
crime
, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the
punishment
. I do agree that
punishment
must
be fix
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for each type of
crime
instead
to search the background of the
crime
.
Nowdays
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,
crime
become
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becomes
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more and more,
such
a
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kill,
a
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rape, a
rob
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or a
coruption
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corruption
.
This
time,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
has a lot of division to stand the right,
such
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a
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police or a
court
.
Furthermore
,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
also
make
a tons
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a ton
tons
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of regulation, detailing
in
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what type of
crime
also
the
punishment
.
For
example
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when we saw a
court
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television, it takes
some
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a
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couple of days until the
punishment
will decide.
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depend
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the
proves
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during the
court
.
Additionally
, there are no fixed
punisment
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punishment
in
court
,
for
instance
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there is a
coruptor
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corruptor
that
take
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takes
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of
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people's money, the number almost two
trillions
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rupiah. The
coruptor
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corruptor
was decided to
in
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jail for 5 years.
On the other hand
, there is a nanny who
steal
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three plates from her boss, the price just a hundred thousand
ruppiah
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rupiah
. The
the
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court
was
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decided the nanny
to
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go in jail for three years. Some people say
,
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it can happen because the boss
pay
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a
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professional
proffesional
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professional
lawyer.
This
case can explain
in
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how justice always
have
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has
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circumtances
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circumstances
, it depends
how
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on how
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good
lawyer
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a lawyer
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we can pay.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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