Sompe poeple believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disgaree. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your own opinion.

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In today's, world the usage of motor vehicles has increased so much and

due to

this

the

pollution

in the environment has

also

increased because of

this

problem people are using bicycles more than usual and

also

the usage of public transport has increased

similarly

there are some benefits and demerits of using bicycle lets discuss some in the following paragraph. To start the management of bicycles will reduce

the

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apply

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pollution

if it reduces the health-related issues

due to

pollution

will

also

reduce

Verb problem

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moreover

the ozone layer will not have any impact

for instance

20 years

back

Rephrase

ago

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in Antarctica

their

Correct your spelling

there

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use

Replace the word

used

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to be no ozone layer damage but moving to now there has been a change where the ozone layer is getting damaged

this

due to

the carbon gas emission from vehicles to reduce

this

management of bike and public transportation should be used more. The main demerit of using the bike is pupil can use it for short distances only like if the office is nearby or going to nearby hotels to have some food

although

it can

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be used

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for short travel it cannot be used for long distances like travelling 10km or 15km it will be hard

additionally

its time consuming plus we need to have a lot of energy to go to the destination place beside these bicycles cannot be used

while

going for shopping at

this

point of time public transport or private transport will help more.

To conclude

in my point of view using more public transportation is best compared to bikes by

this

method we can travel

where ever

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wherever

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we want without any compromises and at the same time reduce

pollution

which was the main reason for the usage of bikes in the first place.

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1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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