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Some people think sport competition creates many trouble while others disagree. Discuss your views and give your opinion

#people #sport #competition #trouble
The given picture describes alterations in a place called
Felixstone
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Felixstowe
 in the UK between 1967 and 2001. It is clear that numerous features were changed, and the greatest changes were that many amenities were constructed and a marina and a pier were obliterated. In the north part of
Felixstone
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Felixstowe
 in 1967, there were two ranges of shops that ran along the sides of the high street, but
then
 one was converted to a range of apartments in 2001. Whereas in the northeast, farmland was replaced by many living facilities,
such
 as a hotel, a swimming pool, and tennis courts. A golf course, which was located in the northwest, remained unchanged. The marina, pier, and fish market in the south were demolished in 2001 in order to separate the area into private and public beaches. Some wind turbines were constructed in the southwest, and a car park was opened up near a hotel and a cafe.
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