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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many people discuss
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 what the results are if
children
 are allowed to make their own choices on everyday matters. There are two different views. Some people think it has a bad impact on kids’
personality
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.
Children
 usually consider themselves
firstly
, which is the reason why they always cry when their wishes don’t be satisfied. So, they tend to give priority to their own needs when making choices, which results in a social individual who only thinks about himself.
In addition
, kids sometimes make
decisions
 with a short-term benefit, just like playing with friends without finished homework, which is making them happy but has a bad influence on their
study
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.
However
, others believe that it is beneficial for
children
 to be allowed to make
decisions
 about matters that affect them. Generally, kids pay attention
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 the things they
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,
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for example
, if a kid
want
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 to play
puzzles
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, he would focus on it until finishing. So, a child who makes his own choices has definite aims and is willing to
completes
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 them without a nudge.
Moreover
, making
decisions
 independently means that
children
 tend to think alone
instead
 of only following others’ words, which is an important skill in their future study and life. In my opinion, allowing kids to make their own
decisions
 about matters which
affecting
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 them has a good impact on growing, while, parents and teachers should pay attention
on
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 them to keep them in
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 right line, after all, nobody is born as a person who is able to distinguish between right and wrong.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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