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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve thsi problem?

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Plastic
, in every shape and
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color
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 is harmful
for
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 the
environment
 and in
the
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recent years, the utilization of
plastic
 items has increased strikingly. The major/main reason for
this
 problem is the new lifestyle of
people
 all over the world. In
this
 essay, various aspects of
plastic
 usage and their solutions to the
environment
 will be discussed as well as examples will be given. On social media, lots of
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actions
 are taken in an attempt to make
people
 aware of their attitudes and the direct consequences that it could have
in
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 our mother nature, like the
plastic
overwelming
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overwhelming
 the
seacost
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seacoast
sea cost
 and hurting
sealife
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sea life
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 animals. Activists believe that if all
people
 could make simple
actions
, starting by reducing our
plastic
consume
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 and denying
plastic
 packages and bottles in
coffeeshops
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coffee shops
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 and restaurants,
for example
, those
actions
 would be a good example and as result, could influence other
people
 to join the cause. Thinking about the bigger picture, governments could invest in
a
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sustainable tourism by advising visitors to take an
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 attitude and advice locals to recycle, reduce and reuse
plastic
 by making advertisements with a sustainable approach and community leaders could clean rivers and the seacoast to make them more attractive to locals and tourists, they could
also
 reward
people
 who take
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actions
,
for example
. Wrapping up, both of them, individuals and governments should spend time and join hands in finding the best way to control the usage of
plastic
 things
that
is
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 doable and realistic, et goals and have common objectives until it
become
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 something
aautomatic
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automatic
a automatic
 and, in an
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 way.
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